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Wednesday 21 September 2016

The kayaking Trip.

The Kayaking Trip
By the US National Whitewater Center (Own work) [CC BY-SA 4.0 (http://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/4.0)], via Wikimedia Commons
Walt: write a narrativeWalt: use and write paragraphs, detailed sentences, juicy words, full stops, capital letters and correct spelling.
USNWC_Flatwater_Kayaking_on_the_Catawba_River.jpg

Some people go on a kayaking trip down a river. The trip does not go exactly to plan...Write to narrate (tell) a story about this adventure.


What is the problem? What goes wrong?
How is it solved and fixed?
Think about:
  • where your story is set (setting).
  • who your characters are – what they do, what they say, and how they think and feel
  • What the problem is and how it is fixed.
  • the order of your ideas and how they are linked.


Remember to:
  • Break your writing into paragraphs (big ideas).
  • choose your words carefully.
  • Be careful with your spelling, punctuation (capital letters, full stops) and sentences.
  • edit – add or delete words or sentences to improve your work.




Planning Space
Crocodiles, attacking ,





Start Writing Here:
It was a windy wild morning in the forest, one day a group of kayakers came along by the river they got into there kayaker then started paddling  while they were paddling by splash there jumped out a humongous crocodile right at them the kayakers were terrified they felt like screaming and really really scared  they tried to swim to shore but the crocodile pushed them near a huge waterfall .


The kayakers were frightened they thought they were gonna die! They started paddling and paddling but they couldn’t get to shore it was a dead end but wait one kayaker saw a vine he told the other kaykers to hold on to the vine so they did they held on very tight the vine was very strong so they climbed up the vine .


So they walked safely back to shore while as they walked roaaaaaaaaar!  Came out a gigantic bear the kayakers screamed ‘’run for your lives’’ one kayaker said but one kayaker stayed where he was  and didn’t move a muscle the kayaker knew why the bear was so angry he gave him a honey jar then the bear went back to it’s cave so then the kayakers stopped screaming and started walking back home .

Thursday 1 September 2016

pes Olympics wheelbarrow race!

PES Olympics Wheelbarrow Race!




      
WALT: write an interesting recount by writing about our feelings and the feelings of others.
WALT: group ideas into paragraphs.


Topic: PES Wheelbarrow race
Audience: PES, friends, teacher, whanau, worldwide blog audience.
Purpose: To retell our Pt England School Wheelbarrow Race and share our thoughts on technology and cheating.

Room 9 has just completed the PES Olympics wheelbarrow race. Apparently there was some cheating in the race? How did this cheating affect you and your race?


Paragraph Options:
What happened during the race.
Who cheated and why it was cheating. How I felt about the cheating.
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What is another technology that people use to cheat.






Paragraph 1
Introduction: Who, Where,What, When?
           What were your feelings?
2  sentences
MakerBots & Drones
4  sentences
Makeymakeys & Hyperduinos
Write Here:
On tuesday 30th of august  rm 9 had a wheelbarrow race. We started off in the pt england school hall.Today I walked into class and I saw a wheelbarrow I wondered what are we going to do today. So when the second bell rang our teacher told us to line up outside  and walk to the breeze.So when we were in the breeze our teacher said to sit on the stone and  we are going to race  and I was so so nervous and I had butterfly in my tummy  .





Paragraph 2   

What happened during the race.
4  sentences
MakerBots & Drones
4  sentences
Makeymakeys & Hyperduinos
Write Here:
During the race it was quite hard to stay on our hands  and quite hard walking on our hands when the girls had their  turn when the boys counted down-5 -4-3-2-1-go! When we started all the girls started falling instead of crawling it was really funny .



Paragraph 3   
Who cheated and why it was cheating. How I felt about the cheating.
4  sentences
MakerBots & Drones
4  sentences
Makeymakeys & Hyperduinos
Write Here:
Our teacher was cheating because it was UNFAIR but It was pretty cool watching our teacher driving the people that was in the wheelbarrow because they were going really fast.But we were just using it for technology and it was so cool.





Paragraph 4   
Conclusion: Feelings about the race/cheating.
2  sentences
MakerBots & Drones
3  sentences
Makeymakeys & Hyperduinos
Write Here:

My feelings about the cheating: jealous,crazy,mad,cross,stink and outrageous.